jamriot 2024-06-20 15:38:57

Nice work! Thanks for participating. This was a fun way to take the defiance prompt and it's good to see that inspiration through the entire story. I like how you have Danny stand up for someone who was once in his shoes (more or less) and I like how you give the characters distinct personalities from eachother! That being said, I think some of the choices felt a little forced. I liked Travis having a different dialect from the other characters, but some choices felt a little out of place or unrealistic compared to how other characters spoke, but I still think it was definitely worth having him speak differently! Overall I think you made some solid choices and I appreciate your participation a lot, and I look forward to seeing what you do in the future!